Romancing with Naivety and Beating Hearts [Licentia Rhyme Form]

by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG   Aug 27, 2007


You`re dying to look cute in your low-rise jeans,
As you head into town, you just turned eighteen;
Harlequin`s running high tonight and you know,
That there'll be no battle scars left out to show.
You`re all done up and the gents turn and stare,
As you stand alone, a few minutes to spare;
Practicing cute lines over in his head,
He asks if you`d like to have a drink instead;
He learned the art of time a few days ago -
Took the chance to perfect it and tonight, that shows.
You`re dying to look cute in your low-rise jeans,
As you head into town, you just turned eighteen.

Harlequin`s running high tonight and you know,
That there'll be no battle scars left out to show;
You throw out resistance and ignore your thoughts,
The pounding in your head is what alcohol bought;
`Cuz a head filled with naivety is sure to have room,
For the side effects of the alcohol you consume.
He looks down at his wrist, surely it`s time to go;
His wife will be mad if he decides not to show -
But the smell on your breath, the look in your eyes;
They leave room for him to make a compromise.
You`re dying to look cute in your low-rise jeans,
As you head into town, you just turned eighteen.

You`re all done up and the gents turn and stare,
As you stand alone, a few minutes to spare;
And he leads you out, as he locks on your arm;
Taking you away, starting off with his charm -
But judging by your staggering stability,
He`ll take away what`s left of your credibility.
You ignore the devil on your shoulder tonight,
Because in those twisted sheets, he makes you feel right;
Romancing with naivety and beating hearts:
He`ll leave you to deal with your angst as you fall apart -
You`re dying to look cute in your low-rise jeans,
As you head into town, you just turned eighteen.

-Jenna Elphick
August 26, 2007

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The Licentia Rhyme Form, created by Laura Lamarca, consists of at least 3 12-line stanzas with the following rhyme scheme: aabbccddeeAA, BBffgghhiiAA, CCjjkkllmmAA

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  • 16 years ago

    by FridusBlueheaven

    Nice writing, 5/5 from me!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Thoughtless Consideration

    Don't even know what to say.
    Best poem I've read on here;
    You're style is utterly flawless.

  • 16 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    Ah, this was wonderful. It's an interesting style, which I've made a mental note to try one day. It was perfect, though. I could picture everything in my head.

    I felt that this line:
    "But judging by your staggering stability," messed with the flow a [tiny] little bit, but apart from that, your poem was flawless.

    Great job.

  • 16 years ago

    by AJ Irving

    I loved it. it was a very unique piece of work.
    I like different pieces of poetry and this was definitely the most different I have ever read in my life. & i should know ive been writing/reading/listening to poetry since i was born.(& i still suck @ writing poetry!!! lol)
    I give you 5/5. u rock.
    Im adding you to my faves this poem too.

  • 16 years ago

    by aDORKable x3

    I almost passed up the chance to read this, but once I finished I was just shocked! Jenna, this was an exceptional piece; one of my favorites! You have such a talent for writing and this one definately shows that. You used this form beautifuly. I doesn't seem like you were restricted to a form, more like the form fit you. ((If you understood that I shall give you a cookie ;] )
    Really great job love!!
    5.5

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