Love -- Just once more

by x.Athame.x   Oct 20, 2007


Let the light flow away
Darkness gains control
Mind is going under
Cannot fight it's hold
The red rose laying there
Memories of the past
The music blares onward
Room starts spinning fast
The holes in the drywall
The hands dripping blood
Tears coming hot and fast
An unrelenting flood
Bracelet that once was whole
Now scattered on the floor
The crack in the mirror
Nothing untouched anymore
What held reality together
Is tearing it all apart
So this is the feeling
Of a ripped and broken heart
The music starts to slow
The rose begins to die
And though sadness overwhelms
Still cannot face the lie
Mind says this is foolish
The radio screams wh-re
And though the spirit pleads, no no
The heart whispers, just once more.

Oct. 19th

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  • 11 years ago

    by RobinAnn13

    Very, very good! Loved reading it! <3

  • 11 years ago

    by Blissful

    Beautiful piece you have here. The loving emotions were captivating and flawless. I loved the pace and everything flowed perfectly. The last sentence was the perfect way to end the poem. Well done *5/5*

  • 11 years ago

    by Teria

    Wow. This one, hun is flawless.

    Though there are no stanzas, the flow is still utterly amazing, because the poem itself is powerful, but each line is not too powerful. (:
    And, the words. . . they just flowed so well. It was amazing.

    The word choice, once again was amazing. You did a wonderful job with the imagery and everything.

    The emotion, was perfection. Wow, honest to God it's amazing. The other poem I just read each line had so much power in it, which is good, it's not bad, but this the power was in the entire poem, it wasn't like; power power power power, it's like. . . p . . . o . . . w . . . e . . . r.

    Do you understand? Now, the power in the last one was still amazing, don't get me wrong. It went well with the poem, but the power in this poem goes perfectly with this poem.

    5|5