Comments : The Thought Never Goes Away

  • 16 years ago

    by Steven

    Nice job and great work.. keep up the good work.. and hope u feel better
    -steven

  • 16 years ago

    by Christina

    Omg i love this poem...it relates to me 100%....5/5.....omg.......im like totally just dumbfounded by it! lol i just love it! im putting it on my favorit poems list u can check it out!

  • 16 years ago

    by SpEcIaLmE

    Very emotional and deep, u really get the point across about what you are trying to say
    it seemed to flow the whole way through
    great job

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Mr Rhee

    Very strong, deep. I remember these feelings. Good work.

  • 16 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    Perfect! actually i can relate about the story and there are times im in that situation.. and i do really understand all the emotions and hard feelings u had put in here.. i can feel that behind this poem was real and hope u can move on.. life is supposed to be in this story so i guess its just normal in spite all the hurts we've been through right? keep it up.. love it 5/5

    actaully i put this one in my fav!

  • 16 years ago

    by firexdancer

    Awww, this is so sad, you did an awesome job of putting your emotions into the poem, you can feel your pain as you read it. the flow of it was a little off, but the poem was still so strong it really doesn't matter. 5/5
    gabriella

  • 16 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Wow a great poem which is written greatly, you have done a great job, but its so sad.
    you are truly talented, a 5/5 from me as you truly deserve it

  • 16 years ago

    by XxXcrystalXcontagiousXxX

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Crystal Gaze

    The peice was long, but I didn't mind it so much.
    Situation is common, and many can relate to it. however nothing really stood out to me.
    It was written well, I just think you can improve by broadening your vocabulary.

    Still a job well done,
    keep it up.
    4/5 --Elly.

  • 16 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    "my body is way to tired to feel your face."
    ^^ ['to' should be 'too'.]

    "I know you have someone knew in your life."
    ^^ ['knew' should be 'new'.]

    "Shes really pretty by the way, I hope you don't lie to her."
    ^^ ['Shes' should be an apostrophe in it.]

    "I can't bare this as long as I honestly thought."
    ^^ [Not "bare", should be "bear".]

    "you were my best friend, the one id run to."
    ^^ ['id' should be "I'd".]

    "but I can't, its not easy."
    ^^ ['its' should have an apostrophe in it.]

    "ill think about it once again and again."
    ^^ ['ill' should be "I'll".]

    --

    Just thought I'd would help you out with some mistakes there. It's a good poem, if a little messy in places. I don't like the random capitalisations. There's no need. You can get your point across without using capitals to do so.

    If it's a true poem, then I'm very sorry, and I hope things are better for you soon. :]

    Nice work.

  • 16 years ago

    by Abu3li

    It's such a deep and full of emotions poem

    i like it and its way of relating us to it

    good luck
    Her Guardian

  • 16 years ago

    by Jack Rabbit

    This is truly and honestly a fantastic poem. You've done a great job. Keep it up. 5/5
    --Jack

  • 16 years ago

    by CY GINDLE

    WOWWWWWWWWWW I could'nd stop reading and hoping for a happy ending but
    thats just me. you have talent keep
    putting your poems up it always feels better
    after you do I KNOW CY

  • 16 years ago

    by damont

    Excellent poem. very detailed and i can feel the emotion when i read it. and i feel your pain through your words in the poem. keep writing

  • 16 years ago

    by TrUtH hUrTs

    Very powerful ending .. but i wudve liked better descriptions in the beginning.. but all in all an intruiging read .. liked it .. kudos ...

  • 16 years ago

    by iloveyouandrew

    I feel exacatlly what this poem states wow its amazing....So deep and beautifully written...Great job Katlynn 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Not

    I can relate tothis its like I went out with boy who i knew where liars but they just wasn't ask much liars as my other choices as of course it didn't last but great poem I love It I should send It to my ex's lol
    {{keep writing more and more great poems}}

  • 16 years ago

    by Christina

    Wow another great poem......keep it up!

  • Another great poem of yours. I felt every feeling coming out of this. You did a great job with explaining the feeling. I absolutely loved it. 5/5

    <mOnStRiTo'S pRiNcEsS>

  • 16 years ago

    by TracyM

    And another amazing poem, wow I really liked this one too. Something I'm sure most people can relate to at some point or other. Good choice of words. I noticed a mistake on the line

    I know you have someone knew in your life.

    apart from that though, a really good read, well done