Tears of blood

Excellent, but rhymes and maybe a little more rhythm could help it. i did absolutely love it though

I really like this poem out of the ones Ive read..
I think I seem kinda attached to this one because this is kinda how I feel inside..trapped...and alone with fear. Im that little girl (Im more like a teen lol)
The emotion was really strong && I really enjoyed it!

This is very well written! The flow felt interrupted at times but i thinkit was becuase the differetn syllable counts sometimes used.
Ovwerall it was a great and enjoyable read!

For the first two lines:
Tears of blood you cry...
tears of blood that wont die...

maybe remove the word 'that'

Also because of the length i think if you broke in down into verses it may be a lil easier to read. It was jammed packed with emotion that really grips the reader.

Your unique style is refreshing!

So I like the way you wrote this poem. you write with your own style and it flows very well. I dont think you should put into stanzas... too many do that... inlcuding myself... and i think that if you tried to do that iwth this poem i wouldnt get the chills i did when i read it for the first time. i loved this poem. as i have mentioned before you are a very mature writer.

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The poem itself was amazing and full of emotion but some of the wording was a little off, and it might be better to put into stanzas because the lines dont flow together as great but would fit amazingly into stanzas

5/5
brittknee