Scars

by Dan Ryan   Dec 18, 2007


Can you take me at my word
Are you so sure I am not fake
That you haven't seen whom you preferred
You were too afraid to make a mistake

The heart is quite deceiving
As it's leaving you no way out
It only cares what you feeling
Your hanging with your drying doubts

Loneliness has taken it's toll
Robbed that which you hold dearest
Splintered another piece off the whole
It's safe to admit you're at your weakest

Everything's dark, no light shining through
You don't realize what this experience
Will finally be giving, even scarring you
For this pain you've earned endurance

You've broken down all your walls
And shed all your former naivety
Those tears won't so easily fall
To add to this pool of bittersweet anxiety

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  • 16 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    A very nice piece. a very enjoyable read.
    sad, but deep. very emotional. [you captured
    the emotion quite nicely] I like your choice of
    words. I liked the ending. Great write. 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by MyEscape

    Okay, so honestly I had to read this twice to fully understand it. The first two lines were my favorite. It was like they were there to make the reader question their heart and mind to see if they really were seeing the person for who they were.
    The eighth line and the fourth stanza were my least favorite...maybe a little too forced or just, to me, the weakest part of the poem.
    The third stanza is truly my favorite. Lines 11 and 12 were very descriptive and easy to relate to for me. Um...I think you have a typo in line 18...it's 'your' instead of 'you'. I think...lol But anyways, overall I liked this piece a lot and found it easy, too easy, to relate to. :)
    *ME*

    *Thanks for all your comments. Your actually the first person to read EVERY new poem I've written and comment it. lol

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