Opinion from a third party

by jLegendc   Jan 21, 2008


I know I don't have the right to say how I feel,
I'm just trying to be real,
If you don't really like him,
Please end his suffering,
And be sure to wake him up in his dream...

He really loves you,
Yet he doesn't have a clue,
If what you're saying is true,
End this charade and let him go,
Before everything becomes worse,
And HELL will become his rendezvous...

The way you're stalling,
Is just prolonging his suffering,
It's like suicide without a hanging rope,
But this is more excruciating,
Because you're just letting him hope...

I stand between love and friendship,
Seeing how my friend is asleep,
Or he's just probably ignoring his surroundings,
I know his mind noticed it,
Yet his heart keeps on denying...

It's better if you'll just hurt him while it's early,
So he'll see,
That if he asks you "do you love me?"
Your answer might be "probably"
This is just an opinion from a third party...

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  • 16 years ago

    by LoveBird99

    Very Unique and well written.

  • 16 years ago

    by Shinobi

    This poem's subject is one that many can relate to. The structure here was solid, but didn't match the rhyming method. The rhymes didn't appear in most of the cases. Although that, your choosing of words expressed true emotions, and that what made it good. Nice work 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    Hmm well i guess this is one of a GREAT opinion.. very cool and trully feelings.. the emotions was absolutely great! i love how u started the poem seems the impact of this poet carried all the great and fabulous emotions.. its nice to read this kind of poet coz i had pick some lessons that i can relate it... great job 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by The Queen

    Nice One..and very well written...flow was amazin too.....

    it reminds me of a friend who was havin the same problem with her girl friend...and sumhow i know what ur tryin to say...

    and il read and comment only ur poems that is not related to love poems..its blocked it my office..but il read those later once i got home..

  • 16 years ago

    by crystaljean88

    I like this poem alot. i like the way the poem is told from another person point of view like in a story. its rlly different n a rlly intresting poem. great write

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