Burning love

by Fear2love   Jan 23, 2008


I love this fire that we create
when we're together, it feels great
your skin is like flames, leaving burn marks on my fingers
your mango perfume lingers
cant stop thinking about you
memories printed in the back of my mind
it never was a time when I didn't care
my love for you will always stay
I cant stand it when your not near
I never felt this way before
your explosively lovable Kisses i adore
when we touch, your warmth heals my pain
you are all I think of, knowing this burning love
will never die away

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  • 12 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    Your so hot, you leave burn marks on my fingers

    ^
    I would change hot to another word. Or just change the first part completely. I think a metaphor or simile would work good here. :] "Your skin is like flames leaving burn marks on my fingers." Something like that. :]

    i never felt this way before

    ^
    It should say I've instead of I. :]

    when i touch, your warmth heals my pain

    ^
    This part doesn't make that much sense.. maybe say "When we touch" for the beginning.

    you is all i think of, knowing this burning love

    ^
    "You're all I think of" would make a whole lot more sense. :]

    I think this was a very heartfelt poem, it just had a few grammar errors. They're small though and easily fixed. :] Great poem!

    Cayce

  • 15 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    This is a really great poem. I loved reading it. Great job. Shanik

  • 15 years ago

    by Cody Jo as you no

    WOWSERS that is a very awsome write and i hope the person you wrote that about nos how much you care!!!!

  • 15 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    Good job!
    keep writing!

    Pooja

  • 16 years ago

    by she

    Nice work, good imagery

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