Whispering Memories

by Lonely Rider   Feb 25, 2010


Whispering moments
of timeless love
surge in my heart,

obsolete promises wander,
abandoned by
capricious words,

Acidic memories,
drenched me again
last night,

Why still stands,
a solitary lighthouse
of ethereal Rhapsody?

Forever waiting
to guide,
you to me.

** written for an Image contest
http://i91.photobucket.com/albums/k291/gravercindy/lighthousetale.jpg

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  • 7 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Beautifulll!!! This poem is amazing and really touched me! I really enjoyed it and am so proud of you! Congratulations on the win!! You really deserve it... This was so beautifully written.. I love the imagery you've created. Wonderful job!

  • 7 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    ^Why still stands,
    solitary lighthouse^

    This couplet is missing a word.....you need an a or a the before solitary and the first line is worded unnaturally. You could have worded it:

    WHy a solitary lighthouse still stands

    Still standing is a solitary lighthouse

    something worded a little different that sounds more natural.

    I know English isn't your first language so you get extra kudos.

    I like the word choice, imagery and emotion.

  • 7 years ago

    by Beautiful Chaos

    Why still stands,
    solitary lighthouse

    ^It feels like there is a word missing in here somewhere

    Aside from this, I thought it was wonderful. Without even looking at the photo that inspired this, I think you did a great job and created a great image in the reader's head. I really enjoyed reading this, nice work.

  • 7 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    Acidic memories,
    drenched me again
    last night,

    *I can really relate to that. I feel that way whenever the memory of someone comes back and I don't know how to handle it. I think you did a wonderful job with the image. Your words are soft and hold so much sadness and pain in them. I love the way this was written. It was simple but the emotions described can be different for anyone. I loved this piece hun, very well done. Nik*

  • 7 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    This poem stood out at me from the beginning of the contest, awesome job. congrats on the image contest