I would change "salty plum." to "Sugary plum" I feel this would create better imagry for the reader as plums are more sweet than salty and it goes to show that just because something is sweet doesn't mean it is nice after all sweetness can be sickly.
I am so jealous of all your poems. I'm not sure how words even do justice.
Vinaceous is definitely not a word I normally see but adored how you fit it in. The repetition was definitely effective as you mentioned 'wine' later on in the poem.
'I saw white mice in your hair.'
^I have never heard of this before. I find so many creative lines in your poems and always have to go look beyond the poem for a deeper meaning. Does this mean that you will be afraid without any reason?
'While you were finding solace
I was finding solace in wine.'
^I loved this. Kind of like this other person is being distant and ignoring you possibly (abandoning you), & you have to find a way to cope with it.
All I can say is at times I had to go above and beyond to find some of the meaning behind your words. I am always fascinated at what you come up with. There is so much more meaning hiding beneath your words, it makes your poems a million times more interesting. This was brilliant.