This hit hard. I wonder at times however if it's really god's words or us? It seems we, humans, have always been talented so far in making up reasons to strike one another in order to prove our superiority. Had there been no religion I'm sure we would've found other motivators.
As to the poem, what I liked most I guess was your tone. This was no dead write - for example, at the part of "so die, none believer!" I heard it being shout out. Not to mention, I value poems hat have are thought provoking and have message.
If I were to change a single thing I would in the 1st stanza make it "and holy texts" instead of "written in holy texts" and in the last stanza I would've removed the first line and went on saying "Reserve places..etc" but then again, that's the way I read it. Well done you.
I am going to join the 'liars'
I wrote a very similar poem a few weeks ago. yours deals in facts that cannot be ignored. i love the message and the debate it will invoke. That is what great poems should do. well done.
Personnaly I think saying "Poetically, I can't appreciate this as a poem", or "For those who lied to you and said it's a good poem; it's totally not", is not very helpful to you, and is kind of rude, and not true, not offence to them, I hope they don't take it the wrong way, but I liked the flow of these piece, I think you had good things to say, even though I am quite relgious and in that way I had to step back when I read this, I think your emotion is spelled out perfectly in the poem. I write long poems mostly and perferably, (for me), so I probably don't have mcuh right to say this, but personnaly I don't think the length of a poem matters as much as it's meaning, I tihnk you did wuite a good job, and have more talent then given credit for, I am really relgious, and the only thing I'd like to say is I felt like you were dissing the christian religion, I could be tired, it late here, but warn someone on the top if that' the case, over all I think you poured your emotions out well and did a great job, don't ever stop writing