Cobweb Free

by Hannah Lizette   May 12, 2013


He used to weave
insults between
my rib cage,
web his fingers
and pluck one by one -
exposing my once
merciful heart.

Venom sipped on
dry, overused veins -
realization and remorse
spun silk between his
last cigar ring.

Spit sizzles upon
his grave and only
parasites will kiss him
goodnight.

A black widow is
finally cobweb free.

Copyright 2013: Hannah K.

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  • 3 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    This poem... just gave me chills in a good way. The way you wrote it is unbelievable. Okay the word useage is perfect in all the right spots. The metaphors are great as well. The way you compare this person to a spider is funny because not a lot of people like spiders. Black widows are very dangerous to humans but here you make this person seem so much worse. I loved the in your face imagery as well. What I mean is you held nothing back here. Especially the third stanza. It seems like the build up is there and the web kept building up inside and after that there is a dark joy that he is gone. The last stanza is the best I've read from you personality. You are sad that you are widow but the "venom" side comes out because you used black widow. That tells me in my mind that the character had something to do with the death. In the end they were the dangerous one. Great write Hannah.

  • 4 years ago

    by xXxMidnight SoulxXx

    I'm sorry this poem made me laugh towards the end i know it's dark and scary but you gotta admit that the third stanza pretty much makes the darkest hearts laugh for we all know it's sad but true that's what we deserve and this poem is nice and dark makes me want it to rain for it would be perfect to pass away the time reading your poetry! :) 5/5

    Ashlin

  • 4 years ago

    by L

    Can I say that is the type of poems that I like reading?

    I mean I love when I read a poem that focuses in the same metaphor and well, the black widow killed her husband... That's what I got from this poem.

    I mean it could have just been the spider trapped on the cobweb and her poisoning someone but based on the first stanza I think the husband caught her on a cobweb and made her bitter and resentful until she finally poison him to gain her freedom but in the end she became a black widow. ( so perhaps I see some symbolism in the "black widow.")

    5/5

  • 4 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Ewww. .spiders. BUT...I loved this...LOVED what you did with this metaphor here..sometimes a cobweb is overused as a trap in poetry, but you added your own spin on it!! I quite enjoyed that :)

    man girl..youre getting me to read dark poetry, thats some talent. I usually don't like dark pieced. this I enjoyed!

  • 4 years ago

    by Amreen

    I really suck at writing such small beautiful pieces which can portray the entire emotion.
    Hannah, I must say this poem is amazing.... amazing!!!! Use of excellent metaphors here and what great emotions!!

    Flawless and amazing!!!

    Keep writing:)