Coordinates

by Hannah Lizette   Oct 7, 2014


37.5000 N, 85.0000 W

At night, when sleep eludes her,
she can feel the tug of destiny
pulling on her heart strings.
The key around her neck carols
like a mockingbird, a constant
reminder that home is nothing
more than an ancient Indian
burial ground.

She always claimed
death before dishonor
but tonight, she is a
pioneer poet gone AWOL.

0.0000 S, 30.0000 W

Changes flood the dock
of her mind. She can't quite
describe the sensation weighing
on her chest; it's like being
reeled in from the shore or
being thread through a
sewing machine.

All she knows is that riptides
know the directions and
for once, she is allowing
her heart to be her compass.

35.3080 S, 149.1245 E

He's anxiously waiting.
(For what, he's unsure.)
One minute, he was
combining tintures, failing
to combine the right mixtures,
resulting in the wrong shade
of dye. The next, he was being
hauled to the bay by an
invisible force.

It was more than a feeling...
it was inevitability.

33.8600 S, 151.2094 E

Threaded across the map,
they were two ends of the
same strand -

discolored,
frayed,
knotted.

Once the needle of fate
interlaced their path,
they created the perfect
shade of love.

They were a coordinated masterpiece.

*club challenge

Inspired by a Chinese proverb:

"An invisible red thread connects those who are destined to meet regardless of time, place or circumstance. The thread may stretch or tangle but it will never break."

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  • 2 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    A thoroughly excellent and beautifully written piece.

  • 2 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    A thoroughly excellent and beautifully written piece.

  • 2 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Judging Comment:

    The title caught my attention because a piece with a title so unique really could be about anything. It's the kind of piece that seems like it'll be all over the place because of the format but ends up being so beautiful it makes you cry. I think this piece was so completely unique that it captures the attention of readers of any genre. The imagery was phenomenal, unlike anything else and yet it was still written so that the audience can actually see this, they can visualize it and understand exactly what you mean. I love that the style you chose was so simple but the piece itself was eloquently elaborate. extraordinarily penned.

  • 3 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Wow Hannah - you really do have a way with words... just in case no one has told you that.. lol.

    I am actually going to be honest and say I did not think you were the author behind this one, now that I read it in your page, I do not know why I did not connect it. I was so focused on the layout in which there was a co-ordinate placed before each stanza, that it kind of blew me away! I thought it was a great idea, and a really nice way to add something different to the usual style of stanza by stanza.

    Well done on making another amazing piece from a challenge, you did really well with the prompts, I know you have been busy lately, but it never shows within your challenge pieces! I really like the thought behind the poem, and the title too is catching.

    Well done!!

  • 3 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    I agree with Crystal, this is such a unique spin on direction. The women in this poem seems not to be home sick at all but looking for that person. That one person her heart decided to claim as her own. But she doesn't know where in the world he is. So she tries around the world to find whom she is looking for. The actual places (for the directions) are an excellent touch because it lets the readers mind travel along with her, as she looks for love. No one truly understands love like the heart, it could be like an anchor weighing her heart down. But she fights the weight. When you are in love the heart just knows and you always have to let it be your guide to find the person.

    I love how you did a double view point poem because they are drawn to each other, though it seems like they have never met. I love all the wording with this too. Especially invisible force, it was just a calling and he answered the call of love. That ending is emotional (in a good way honestly). The ending line is great because you wrap up the plot in such a beautiful way. They were meant for each other. Very unique write Hannah. Excellent work. 5/5