Fields of dew speckled greenery lay ahead;
soft, flowing, sweet smelling beds of grass.
She slips off her shoes and runs,
letting the moisture seep between her toes.
She feels lighter.
Gasping for a breath of air to fill her lungs;
she drops to her back in a fit of giggles.
Looking up between the rustling leaves
she sees the white marshmallow clouds floating by.
She feels happy.
Closing her eyes for what feels like mere seconds
She finds herself in a blissfully, deep sleep.
Dreaming of the beauty of the world after a light rain:
the rainbows bringing colour to a darkened sky.
She was peaceful.
Awakening to a smile on her sun kissed face;
she lazily stretched her tired limbs.
Rising up, she found herself humming a familiar tune
as she joyfully skipped across the field to home.
She was finally free.
Nams...ahhh I want to run like that! There are so many things I like about this poem.
Firstly, your vocabulary here is so rich that the vivid descriptions of the actions taking place lures me in more and more.
Secondly, the way the beautiful vocabulary ties up with the poem structure. I really adore that every stanza ends in a one sentence line of how this lady in here feels. That emphasis given is a breath of fresh air as I read the whole piece.
Thirdly, the events are so put in a beautiful order that the read makes a very refreshing experience. It's like I was there breathing the fresh air with her.
Over-all this is surely a fantastic poem and is going into my faves. Well done! :-)
Couldn't resist! Couldn't resist!! Running wild and free.....a title that captures my heart before I even read it. I imagined a girl running across an open field. And behold...Nams delivers .....
It seems free verse however there are stanzas and structure with each end line of the stanzas. First stanza is breathtaking with descriptions like fields of dew speckled greenery... Sweet smelling beds of grass. Then she runs barefoot.
Almost as if you were or wish to be this person.
The ending of each verse is 'she feels...' Beautiful!
Second stanza...'drops to her back in a fit of giggles'..rustling leaves ...marshmallow clouds..breathtaking Nams! I'm their with you...I'm wishing this was me. Oh this is going into the favorites.
Third stanza is sort of daydreaming... Of rainbows and she is at peace. I have no words here Nams other than each stanza maintains the rhythm and flow of your write.
Fourth stanza filled with wonderful descriptions of sun kissed...humming a familiar tune...skipping....free!
I can't suggest anything here...because this poetry has blown me away to a beautiful place. Maybe changing 'sees' to views? But I wouldn't change a thing. Hugs Nams
Marky Mark -
Another in your favourites! WOW I am def. honored by that!
Im glad you enjoyed.. I suppose this was more of a poem when i was having a "good day" i suppose.. had no worries of depression or anxiety or issues.. I was carefree.. Just living in the moment and enjoying the sun and happiness! :)