Beautifully penned. This piece can take on a different meaning. One is that of a follower and two, that of a person so captivated by the other's love that they'll obey every command. Yet it's beautifully penned. An enjoyable read.
The last line has its own heavy quality which is making this write remarkable. I like this write as it’s giving a great knowledge about love; one should always be good towards his partner. That’s only called a proper love. Each couple should make their own dream world of love.
A one sided relationship will always bring smiles only
on one side at the cost of another's happiness, freedom to voice
or just be allowed to be loved and also respected. This type is seen
in many places and I feel terribly angry...I hope this isn't true for
you my dear...take care
I think you're dealing with an exceptional subject here. One that is often the stimulus for many poems, stories, songs, etc, and so I feel it's imperative that one bring something special to the table, either through perspective, vocabulary or some other means. This said, I feel as though - personally - I discovered nothing new.
I do apologies if my comment has come across unfair or rude, as that was not my intention at all. I thoroughly applaud you for taking on such a weighted subject. However, you're previous comments are on the contrary to mine, so perhaps I just missed something. Either way, I look forward to reading more of your work.
Hello, Bradley. A comment is always appreciated and just because it's not the same with the others doesn't mean it's not okay with me. I agree with you that it is not something new, it's very true, as my friend Brenda has affirmed it thus. This situation of being controlled is clearly something any one in the whole world can experience, generation to generation. How you see the poem is important and I appreciate the time you have given to read this. :-)