Anonymous Falling Stars

by mossgirl19   Aug 29, 2017

Of the many wars I face
The hardest of them all
Is to look into your eyes
And see nothing but anonymity.

It is my defeat;
To be reminded everyday
That I no longer occupied
The vast void in your universe.

When stars explode
They are spectacular no more,
And the black hole will
Slowly feed on the debris.

Eventually, I found myself
One with the meteor shower-
Disguised as falling stars
While being burned to death.


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  • 9 months ago

    by Sherry Caayupan

    Well done! I liked this about feeling like an outcast... sad poem but nice write! :)

  • 9 months ago

    by Fredy

    Great piece!!! Amazing imagery

  • 10 months ago

    by RustySoul

    Wow what a heart wrenching piece with a touch of metaphysics! Great write Mel.

  • 10 months ago

    by Maple Tree

    One small and tiny suggestion I have for this piece, is the last word of your poem.
    When ending a poem, it sounds so lovely and flowy when you use a two or three syllable word. Death is a sudden stop to your poem....try the word alive...just to yourself you don't have to add it...I'm just want to give you another angle to look at....

    This poem is breathtaking, I do hope it Grace's the front page!

  • 10 months ago

    by CJ Maleney

    There is nothing more I can add that has not already been said

    Simply wonderful

    Craig x

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