A rant poem. These poems are a good outlet, aren't they? You express much of what's wrong with the world. From hate fled wars, to put selfish acts. I like how finish by offering the world advice.
You are right about choosing the right path. I think, ideally this starts with governments. They need to invest in education and young families. If we can our children up in the right way, giving them a healthy moral compass, then they will grow up as responsible adults. Having said this, we need to act now. This poem tries to reach out, urge people to make a difference. I notice a common theme too with this write and your Mother's day one. It's about acting before time runs out. I feel this is especially important to you. You more than most feel the hands of time. It's writing like this that should show us that we can't take time for granted. The time to make a difference is now.
Thanks Milly. I know we haven't reached out to one another for a while, but u want to say, I'm glad you did. I've missed you x
Thankyou kushqueencj for asking. By all means share this poem on face book it has an important message and should be shared but please do include me as the writer in case I publish it in a book later. I see so many poems marked anonymous doing the rounds :) All my best wishes Milly x
Milly this is a very thought provoking, truthful and raw piece which makes you look at things a little more differently that yes there seems to be more hatred and war nowadays than ever before and it's a very sad truth and worries me how today's children will turn out because of what the media wish to show personally I no longer listen to the news as it upsets me too much.
Fantastic write! We all have this choice between good and bad, right and wrong every single day. I enjoyed this piece very much. Well done!
9 months ago
Milly, i do love the rhyming and structure of this poem. The meaning is what i think a lot of people think about but never have the words to say.
The rhyming is not forced at all and it flows with the poem well. A lot of times it is difficult to use the rhyming structure "aaaa"- as in all the last words of each line rhymes, but you did it well to not interupt the poem itself.
I do love 4 stanzas per line in a poem because it gives the reader a lot to work with. Usually in a longer poem the writer sometimes goes off track and writes something that doesn't go along with the poem itself. I think you did great to keep on topic.
The poem itself is filled with a few different emotions in my opinion. The beginning seems to be filled with frustration at the world and all the hate and negative it is filled with, but as you go deeper into the poem, it becomes more and more positive and it feels like you are truly speaking from your heart and i as the read believe what you say is true.
This really is a thought provoking poem because you give the reader what (you) as the writer feels and it makes me think about how i should feel about this topic.
We should all come together as one and make this world a better place, despite our differences is what i believe the core of the poem means. Well done.