I`m just bored, so commenting on people`s work. =D Hope you don`t mind.
I gave this poem a 4/5 because of the flow and the rhyming. In poetry, as I`m sure you know, flow is very important. I just couldn`t get a secure grasp of flow anywhere in this poem - that part needs some work. But the rhyming also messed me up - only one of your stanzas rhymed. I don`t know if this was an unrhyming poem, and you didn`t realize that you had rhymed- but you did, and it kind of messed me up. I would either make all stanzas rhyme, or make none of them rhyme. Just my opinion. =D