Memories...

I like it :)
its realli good.
comment mine?
xx

Rumaging through the memories
of those bygone days...
I fumbled across the smiles
that were brought my way...
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You have painted quite clear imagery within your lines here without totally revealing your action. Excellent! I get an image of someone sorting through old pictures.
One little error .... rumaging = rummaging

Along the journey
on which turn...
did I lost the dreams
I made once...
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3rd line ---- > did I lose the dreams

Alienated.... an aching Heart
Broken .... teared apart
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I love these lines but perhaps you would rather ....
Broken .... torn apart

Silently,
My soul cries...
As I rummage through the memories
of the years gone by...
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Very sad, touching ending. You have expressed the ache in the heart we get when looking through past memories.

Except for a few minor errors I really enjoyed this read. It expressed such deep sadness.
Well done
Luanne

I love the choppiness, if you know what i mean.. the way it stops and starts (in a flowing way) adds to the effect of the poem