Lullaby {Contest}

by BREEawNUHH   Aug 8, 2008


Sing to me, darling,
and help me to rest.
Tell me that you care,
and that I'm the best.

Sing to me, sweetie,
and hold me tonight.
Tell me I'm the colour,
to your black and white.

Sing to me, love,
and give me a kiss.
Tell me I'm the one,
that you always miss.

Sing to me, old flame,
and hope that I'll hear.
Tell me you're not okay,
and life is what you fear.

Sing to me, my mistake,
and say you need me.
Tell me you're broken,
and one day I'll see.

Sing to me, my regret,
this nice little lullaby.
You said you're sorry,
but you tend to lie.

Stop singing to me,
'cause we're through.
I have moved on,
and you should, too.

Briana Coulter
08.08.08

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  • 17 years ago

    by Cyber Saiyan

    Great poem.

    It flows well from sentance to sentance.

    Reminded me of a long lasting relationship summed up in a few stanza's.

    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    Though this would make great song lyrics the poetic metaphors stand out

    I love it

  • 17 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "Sing to me, darling,
    and help me to rest.
    Tell me that you care,
    and that I'm the best."

    ^Beautifully written, great opening and the rhyming is wonderful!

    "Sing to me, sweetie,
    and hold me tonight.
    Tell me I'm the colour,
    to your black and white."

    ^Very sweet words here, and I like how in every stanza you start out with, "Sing to me..."

    "Sing to me, my regret,
    this nice little lullaby.
    You said you're sorry,
    but you tend to lie."

    ^I noticed that there was no rhyming here, that kind of throw me off but otherwise I liked it....

    "Stop singing to me,
    'cause we're through.
    I have moved on,
    and you should, too."

    ^Good ending, and I like how you wrote this. Keep writing, always and forever....

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