Verse Never Works for Me.

Unreturned confessions, obsessions.

^^ way to many big words in one sentence, especially when the entire poem isn't filled with that kind of language.

I've read a lot of your other poetry as well, and it seems to me as if you're writing about the same thing over and over. I could be wrong, but I think it would be cool if you wrote about something else than drinking alcohol to forget and so on.

I'll give you a 4. It was good.

-- Alexandra S

Amazing poem! emotion, flow, creativity, and diction was on the dot! the detail you put in each line blew me away. the story behind this poem is wonderful...you should write stories....i know you have the talent...

keep it ip..
have i mentioned you are a very tanleted poet?
well yeah i have! and i'll say it again! and again!

**Ada**
*aBSwaBHiaPL*

Your rhyming scheme is a very unique one, but it makes this poem what it is.

"Recovering from too many nights out
Drinking to forget, smoking to erase
Destruction keeps me warm at night,
Not like anyone I know, they're just for show."

i love this line, it shows that your in pain and you rely on these things to help you get through it. But also "destruction keeps you warm at night", i assume you mean you enjoy the pain in a way. I too enjoy feeling pain over feeling nothing at all, it reminds us we are alive.

"I could slip a subliminal reference here,
You won't find it, you never tried looking."

i love this line, it really says something about you and this story the poem tells. You know the person all too well and you know your words would be wasted because they are too ignorant to look for it.

this is a very good piece.

overall i give it a 5/5

keep up the great work.
god bless
-chris

Wow well, I doubt I can follow up on the previous comments, they went really in depth. But, I must say I found this poem very unique.

If I am correct, you basically state in these lines:

"I could slip a subliminal reference here,
You won't find it, you never tried looking."

...The meaning of the poem, that there aren't any hidden messages, and that someone close has some type of trouble?

Nothing really wrong that I can see, I did find it to be blunt at one or two times, but to be honest I doubt anyone would really care.

Great Job, I must say, you really know your poetry. =D

Just because it was last year
Doesn't mean it has lost meaning;
And I guess that's the same for you,
Unreturned confessions, obsessions.
--------I think the last lane was a bit off for this stanza. Im not sure though. But I liked how you wrote the three lines, they were very transparent.

My cutting room floor is getting full.
Everything fits somewhere, but where?
No one will tell me, no one knows,
Even if they did, they aren't new, they aren't you.
------I think the word aren’t you didn’t fit in this line. Im sorry maybe im mistaken. But frankly I liked the first three lines, They were too deep and somehow dark plus you could actually feel the peak of this poem.

Recovering from too many nights out
Drinking to forget, smoking to erase
Destruction keeps me warm at night,
Not like anyone I know, they're just for show.
--------This stanza is more than amazing. Everything went together perfectly. The idea, and the descriptions fitted well.

I could slip a subliminal reference here,
You won't find it, you never tried looking.
Now I think that it's okay for once
I've got the city lights in my eyes, demise.
----------A very heartbreaking ending. I could actually feel the sadness in here. Overall it was a transparent short poem of a girl who has a heart that was broken.Good job..5/5