Amidst the Seasons (R.I.P ADAM)

Nice poem.
i just lost a friend named ADhAM on the 19th of this month and your poem just brought me to tears because it expressed how i truelly feel.thanx.

Very touching. It made me cry and I know your pain. I've lost a few friends and 1 to depression. Congrats on your win as well. It was much deserved

Gennie,

Congrats on the win!!!!!!
You truly deserved it:)

(((big hugs)))

Ingrid

Each line had a stunted, hollow frailty to it. There were no obvious attempts to find artificial flow or continuity, it just rolled along in a sincere yet abrupt manner. This poem was an ice cube down the neck of seasonal cheer. I hope it reaches the target audience with aplomb. :-)

Good use of metaphors in this deeply saddening piece. I am sorry for your loss. Depression is such a horrible thing and the grief felt by the ones left behind is very hard. Excellent job on this piece, good flow and word choice and is void of forced rhyming.