Can I? (Confessions)

by Dark Savior   Jan 19, 2009


I know I can't be a lot of things that I want to be
but please don't remind me, that I'm only me.

I was never an amazing person, or even a good one,
I don't have anything to show for what I've done.

If I had to sit down and think of something near,
you would most likely see me shed a tear.

not for a lost love, but for who I should be,
If you just give me the chance then you'll see

My heart is sore and tired of all this fighting,
but not from love, but from all this writing

I'm sorry for all the lies and people I've hurt
but is a confession done while above the dirt?

I wish I could tell you about a story of good and true
but then I'd have another lie that I'd have to confess to

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  • 14 years ago

    by Andrew

    Now this is a really great poem. The flow was really superb and the rhymes made your work fun to read. You stayed withing the title that i really loved. I categorically loved this part "....see me shed a tear, not for lost love but for who i should be". It showed how much the person confessing in this poem feels and how much it hurts him being the person that he is. This was a truly amazing piece.....5/5. Keep up, you got talent.

  • 14 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    I know I can't be a lot of things that I want to be
    but please don't remind me, that I'm only me.

    *I know this feeling too well. I hate it when people tell me I'm just me...they don't understand that I want to wake up and be someone else. Nice way of expressing that. i love the two line style you got going on. Veyr simple, but each line is important*

    I was never an amazing person, or even a good one,
    I don't have anything to show for what I've done.

    *I can relate to this too. Sometimes we think we are bad people, when really we just remember the bad we've done, while others remember the good. I can honestly say I think you're a good poem. You always make me smile with your comments...now would a bad person do that? Nope. Anywho I liked this poem. I know how you feel. Great work. Nik*

  • 14 years ago

    by kelleyana

    I think the most honest persons are those who are honest with their ownselves, and if these words concerned you, you are an honest person that is not searching for perfection, but trying to be the best you can. I like this poem, kel.

  • 15 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Touching ... its like you have written straight from the heart ... some emotions that have been tucked up and here you have vented out everything ...

    In the starting stanza I could feel slight frustation in you ... its like when someone tries to change you and you resist ... the later parts become more sorrowful and sad ... its like there's a differnt person inside you than what people perceive you to be ... thats how I felt... beautiful

    but is a confession done while above the dirt?
    ^^ very well penned...

    wonderful read...

  • 15 years ago

    by Nobodys Hero

    This is such a sad poem, It's a really good write however =] It's emotionly honest and very sincere. The flow was perfect and you carried emotion through each stanza very well. Great work yet again