Under Study

I just felt like this piece was missing something. Depth, perhaps. Or strength.

(I don't mean this a an insult, by the way.)

Brad

P.S. Please comment and vote honestly on every poem you read.

This is a very sad write, the repitition of the words 'im sorry' was used very well =]

The flow was carried through nicely and the rhyming was very good. A short poem but one that held a lot of emotion and got the point across.

This poem is so sad. the flow isreally good.

I'm sorry for so many things, so many unspokens
most of all i'm sorry I couldn't save you from choking.

this is my favorite part even if its really sad. great job.