Torn between two lovers

by Ingrid   Jan 24, 2009


Torn between two lovers

Hearing her sweet voice on the line
brings out deep feelings so divine
In his minds he sees her radiant eyes
of emerald green clear as the skies
Her long blond hair, shiny and soft as silk
Smooth velvet skin an ivory shade, like milk
Her words make him feel special, so alive
And into the ocean of love and lust he dives
feeling guilty for the girl that lives with him
But being with her made his world grow dim
He is in love with the lady that captured his heart
who made him feel king of the world from the start

Written for a contest, based on this song :
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_BVxUhoYcj0&feature=related

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  • 8 years ago

    by PETER EDWARDS

    In love with two people, and all the guilt that can cause, all elequently put into a truly heartfelt poem.
    This is a good piece Ingrid, so descriptive and full of emotion. Well penned.

  • 15 years ago

    by Timothy

    Hey man, Im not saying your poem is horrible, but sometimes I think its more who you know, than talent on this site.
    Anyway, I really think that your poem was okay, but you could have probably have written a better one. Hope you stay writing at poems-and-quotes for years to come.

  • 15 years ago

    by LoreNz0

    An excelent poem, i thought of the song b4 i went to the link. you captured the essence and feelings from the song very well acurately. it doesent matter if this actually happened to you or not because you tapped into all the right things. a good song and a great poem.

  • 15 years ago

    by Sylvia

    It is a dilema (spelling?) when you love two different people but in the end, only one of them can make you feel like this. Good job. 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Cara

    Awww what a fantastic write. I love the song that your poem was based off and you wrote a poem that matched the lyrics very well :]
    The flow and rhyme were amazing and really added an extra thing to your poem.. it was really very well done :]
    Keep up the fantastic work Ingrid :]
    5/5

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