The Enchantment

A good one. Liked the style of your writing here. Strongly depicted, good use of metaphors and well written lines. Enjoyed it!

Well, beautifully written I must say!
You held my attention from start to finish:)
Good usage of words to paint an image of a woman under the spell of an evil man..

Take care,

5/5 Ingrid

"Soaring high above my comfort zone
Putting myself in these vexatious positions
Unaware of the underlying consequences
That will sneak up and wait for me to find"

A wonderful opening, I love the word choice, it grabbed the readers attention and brought them into this piece.

"You made up my mind in just seconds
Deciding a fate that I couldn't resist to abandon
Growing more unlike myself each passing day
Awaking from nightmares that I couldn't comprehend"

This is a captivating and kind of dark stanza, I find this very suspenseful and you had me completely absorbed in each line. Excellent work!

"Fear spread within my veins like a wildfire
My heart began to fully regret the arrangements made
But as dangerous as he was, I couldn't resist the thrill
The magnificent thrill that he shot right through me"

I love that simile, gives the reader a lot of detail. I also like the fact that you are drawn to this thrill, drawn to this sudden excitement.

The only thing was that in those last two lines you repeated "thrill" which kind of threw me off. Maybe reword one of them to something different?

"Scared as I feel, leaving is far from my mind
Neverending silence consumes my every thought
I dare not struggle free from your tight arms
As they lock around my powerless figure"

Such vivid descriptions, you describe all that is happening around you and exactly what you are feeling, bringing this piece alive to the reader. I didn't really like "scared" in the first line, kind of cliche in my mind.

But I do like "powerless figure", it gives the reader the idea that there is a greater person with you, someone superhuman it seems.

"Taken prisnoer by a formidable phantom
The brush of his fingers as they graze my cheek
Have stunning repercussions on every corner of my flesh
And I become more deeply attached to the strings of his soul"

First line: "prisnoer" should be "prisoner"

The next three lines were breathtaking! I am nominating this poem, its seriously one of your best, no the best poem you have written yet. Where did you come up with "strings of his soul"? How cool is that line, nice work! :)

"The sound of my name as it passes your lips
Sends spin-chilling sensations throughout my being
Gradually I begin to fall deeper into the enchantment
Slipping under the charm as you quickly reach my side"

A excellent ending, 5/5 from me. I think that this poem belongs in the dark category, because the whole scene is kind of dark and contains so much thrill. I have nothing left to say, beautiful work. Keep it up!

Have a good weekend, see ya probably next week.

~MaryAnne