Fallen Down

Life filled with love,
Not a care in the world.
Too bad I've never known it,
Always below the weather not above.

>nice beginning...we will all know it..and believe me some times when u knw it..it wont be too bad that u didn b4 hha

>>2nd stanza was kind of sad..and i loved
the opening life of it..was kind of like a short image

Feelings I've known forever
-Sorrow, pain, and loneliness-

>>this is SO bitter..reveals hard experience
and sad times..enough not to see hope

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Regret fills the lines in my face,
>>this is my fav expression...so true..i wouldnt have expressed this idea any better..impressed me

ur last line was kind of a bomb..like u fell out of a spit of hope..very sad writing but a realy good one
loves ur work
5/5

Very touching write... gives a feeling of loneliness ... well expressed.

I can feel the pessimism in this piece but I think we all go through this stage, thinking that nobody will love us or that it will come our way, but just like Sylvia said it's still early & when you find the right person you'll know that it's right. Great job

You're young yet so in time you will know love. It may not seem that way now but it will change. Only thing I see is in 1st verse, 3rd line know should be known. Well done Austin.