This is amazing, this is fabulously written ..one of the most remarkable poems by you, and worded in the most perfect way.
A coherent piece with original feelings, yet those that many can relate to.--I as one.
I so love the feeling of being imperfect that you expressed at the end of 1st stanza, then made a connection to it by your ending line in the last stanza..
this is mastered.
written words from my heart
or tears spilled or possibly
a release from my captivation
of being so imperfect.
okat 1st stanza, black blood was not a really powerful opening for your stanza but that really doesn't matter for me because the stanza it self was very strong, and well structured. Sad however, yes sad I really think the release from your captivation of being imperfect IS PERFECT..I so so lovve this..!!
transfix on perfection,
^^fanatastic, I so love the
condradicted impression that wavers
between these 2 lines and the lines before it..
linger on fallacy, seeping
into untold amount of verses.
^^^wow this is fantastic..very creative austin, the wording is incredible and I love the power of your words here..
Finally a drip sustains
^^i think it's very smart to say a drip..rather than specifying again..a drip of what.
an ending to my insanity
adequate but lacking
everything I've become.
^^^this was very strong, and it left a very huge impact..i feel the loss of your thoughts..and the knowledge of them . Both at the same time, I think you played this poem so well..like all your poetry..