Blood of My Pen

by Jad   Jan 7, 2011


Black blood-
written words from my heart
or tears spilled or possibly
a release from my captivation
of being so imperfect.

Unraveling emotions,
these words
transfix on perfection, yet
linger on fallacy, seeping
into untold amount of verses.

Finally a drip sustains
an ending to my insanity
written mindlessly;
adequate but lacking
everything I've become.

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  • 9 years ago

    by Rania Moallem

    This is amazing, this is fabulously written ..one of the most remarkable poems by you, and worded in the most perfect way.
    A coherent piece with original feelings, yet those that many can relate to.--I as one.

    I so love the feeling of being imperfect that you expressed at the end of 1st stanza, then made a connection to it by your ending line in the last stanza..
    this is mastered.

    Black blood-
    written words from my heart
    or tears spilled or possibly
    a release from my captivation
    of being so imperfect.
    ^^^
    okat 1st stanza, black blood was not a really powerful opening for your stanza but that really doesn't matter for me because the stanza it self was very strong, and well structured. Sad however, yes sad I really think the release from your captivation of being imperfect IS PERFECT..I so so lovve this..!!

    Unraveling emotions,
    these words
    transfix on perfection,

    ^^fanatastic, I so love the
    condradicted impression that wavers
    between these 2 lines and the lines before it..

    linger on fallacy, seeping
    into untold amount of verses.
    ^^^wow this is fantastic..very creative austin, the wording is incredible and I love the power of your words here..
    brilliaaaaanttttt

    Finally a drip sustains
    ^^i think it's very smart to say a drip..rather than specifying again..a drip of what.
    amazing job..Catchy

    an ending to my insanity
    written mindlessly;
    adequate but lacking
    everything I've become.
    ^^^this was very strong, and it left a very huge impact..i feel the loss of your thoughts..and the knowledge of them . Both at the same time, I think you played this poem so well..like all your poetry..
    amazing austin..amazingggggggg

    5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by M Colella

    What a technique you have for writing . I enjoyed this poem, it speaks to me in ways I won't try to explain. What a great theme and your wording is absolutely brilliant

  • 9 years ago

    by Cindy

    Austin
    Very deep feelings come from your words in this piece. So many feelings can be released from the pen
    Great job!

  • 9 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    I like the title as well as the depth of this write. I feel a deeper emotion with each stanza..a heart tugging write..take care.

  • 9 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    ..raw and real and effective..
    .......I can Feel it........