Breaking the Habit

Wow...can I just say, WHAT an emotional piece!

"Wounds scar my emotions,
When my heart yearned for you,"

Here I would make the W in when lowercase, since after emotions you have a comma :) Grammatically correct and all that, lol.

I like how you don't have a consistent rhyme scheme. Sometimes it's a full rhyme, sometimes it's not. Sometimes it's right next to each other, sometimes it's in the beginning and then end of a stanza. I thought it worked really well here, and really didn't feel forced for me at all. In fact I didn't even realize it had rhyme until my third read through!

"I stand in opposition of the wind,
fighting a useless battle I can't win."

I love this bit, and thought it stuck out the most to me. The opposition of the wind was a great way to say how you feel, and I think it was very clear, with a strong image. I could feel it there. Usually the useless battles are the one you never win. My grandma used to always say pick and choose your battles, the ones that aren't worth anything, you'll lose. :)

Very strong ending that give some self esteem and self worth. I really liked this, Jad. Really sad, and I hope everything is okay! :)

I had to read this. Only because the title was one of my favorite songs. :] Anyways, onto the poem:

but truth paints an overcast
with torn sheets of paper
as a simple contrast,
denying what I know is true.
-- Wow. Nicely worded here.

So I'm breaking the habit
and closing the veins that bleed
-- I can relate. Powerful words.

The ending was very nice. Happy endings are always good ones. :]

Great poem, the title breaking the habit symbolizes change, and one willingness to do so means alot.

AUSTIN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I am touched, but you already know am touched whenever you finish writing a sad piece!

The emotions in this poem, the word choice, and the flow...the pain and the passion that I can feel with each letter you dropped here...makes me feel so sad..

you have chose the perfect sadness for the perfect depressable people lol...and the perfect feelings for the imperfect emotion (hurt)...which inspired me so much to write a new poem...

your talent, is something else..yet you talk about my poem! Damn it..this was a pure art for a poem! and I am touched..

this was my fav part :

So I'm breaking the habit
and closing the veins that bleed
as I close my eyes for the last time
for I am standing above the hurt,
and finally I know that all I need
is to release myself of these binds.

^^^
extremely a killer for an opening!
I love you austin, I love ur work...and this better be just a poem..or else am gna kill her :D :P

FIVE
and hope it wins..sorry no votes :( :( :(left..

a winner in my book, however

A strong emotionsal write by you Austin...that I thought was well written and expessed. Many of us have been there...

"Holding on to what I should let go,
I stand in opposition of the wind.."

I loved these lines..... Also :-

f"or I am standing above the hurt,
and finally I know that all I need
is to release myself of these binds. "

WELL DONE Austin.. this poem speaks of overcoming our emotional battles and coming out a winner! ( Which this poem is to me for all that it expresses) :) I love it =] Great Job!