My Hero

This is a really great poem i just lost my grandfather and my uncle... just one tiny suggestion... carol is a woman then hero would actually be heroine (not to be confused with the drug heroin... amazing what one letter can do to a word) anyway just thought id help ya out a lil

Oh wow, I just lost my aunt and this hit home so hard it brought tears. A very emotional write done with dignity and brilliance.
Super great
Connie

No matter what time of the day or in what mood one reads this one...it would still turn out to be so emotional and so heartfelt.

Mixed emotions of agony & acceptance have been captured in words very poetically & that's where your maturity with this art played role.

Wishing you all the strength & hope you release more.

all the best and take care

A wonderful tale of someones love for someone so dear to them. You have done a incredible job, Nik. Your emotions are poured into this poem in frustration and pain and in love. The lost of this friend who has meant so much to you can easily be seen with your words that strike deeper then the surface can show. I loved the way you told this poem by describing the attributes of this friend and then describing yourself as a inferior person and how you admire them and who you still do. Incredible!

"Warrior... always
ready for the battle
of life. But she was
never cold, never bitter.
I'm bitter as I move
dead flowers from
this grave. I'm bitter
as I read this name
engraved in stone. I'm
bitter as I cough out
another silent scream."

This was my favorite stanza as I could feel this intense agony coming from within you of all this anger of losing this dear one. Your wording is also very poetic and brings many images to my mind for me to go through as I read the poem.

All in all, I loved this poem from beginning to end. Your words tell a sad story of lost but you have done it so creatively and beautifully in a sad way. I hope your friend rest in peace and that you can learn from how she conducted herself and try to be like her and remain strong even when you want to feel so weak. Great job and keep writing!

OH nIKKK nikkkkk Nikkkkkkkkkkkk
my love my dear.....i know how bad it is to lose someone close..and I know that Carol meant so much to you may she RIP but ohhh I can't find the words....be strong..be strong and be faithful and believe in fate...and be NIK,,,,yes! be nik, nik whom I knew for a year....the strong lovely woman who stands by my side all the time...NiK who writes wonderful poetry...ok? ??? just stay like what I have always known you.. for I loved it so much..

now with this write...trullly you brought tears to my eyes, and this is going to be nominated the next week and it should WIN orrr am gonna complain! because it was such a perfect piece that holds all of your emotions...and all of the misery you feel,, and da*n the wording and the structure, i dont care bout them...i just LOVED the metaphors..... that proves how much she was close to you.

i SWEAR i wouldn't be able to organize my feelings in such a magical way to perform a poem that is perfect and depressing if i were you at the moment....for i know what it is like to bewail a piece of you..:(

it is worth not only a five but a win too and i will never forget it, NEVER!