Sad Poem

A very accomplished piece of writing. Excellent. Picked at random and pleased I did!

AND LOL bahahahaa now i know where you got the title from!!!!! you got it from the sections!!! hahahahaha :P:P

You are amazing...totally completely endlessly..... amazing..

Bad. Fair. Good. Very Good.... EXCELLENT!!!!

:p

It always feels refreshing to read your poems!

5/5

You won't rest next to my eyes
when I rouse with tomorrow,

^
this already sets the atmosphere,
with this very phrase you had me..
i just thought...sigh..okay this is going to be something...

tonight will be the last dream
I dare to let go, and last hope
I give up on
^
this is so simply put,yet it weights..
..it all comes so effortlessly to you doesnt it ? -_-'

No longer will I cleanse my soul
with the warmth of a spotless
ray that dresses my bed with
its cheerful awareness

^
naw mean..
this had me thinking of mel (melpomene)
because it is exactly what she does to me sometimes..leaves me with a straight face...the kind when you go like "damn guys :|' who even thinks of dressing a bed with rays? like seriously...where does it come from? and besides that the image of a bed full of sun rays was very beautiful...
thank you for that... i wished i could capture it to show you all i get in my mind when i read your poetry...

At dawn I will go blind and light
you will no longer emerge into
the darkness of my eyes,
won't dazzle me with magic
that glows and only glows
beyond my wisdom

^
i have heard of light within eyes,
have heard of sparkly eyes
ive heard of placing smiles in eyes..
but light no longer emerging into the darkness of the eye...like..(wanna say the f word again)...

it funny because,although your pieces are so highly relate-able they are extremly unique...and you would never sound cheesy,not even if you tried...it just doesn't happen...you're too good.

:)