Liquefy the night

by Jenni   Aug 20, 2011


The alluring ambiance
of afterglow is peeking
onto the breezy meadow,
mesmerized by a nymphs
delicately chiseled features
that veil frenetic insecurities.

An awkward obscurity
lingering on her velvet body,
enfolding her like a deceptive
second skin, intoxicating
her cracked soul, trying to
merge with it and it reveals a
sincere mourning that
causes her to writhe.

The purity that purfled
her heart exists no longer.
Darkness caressing her
carefully but her cherubic
voice speaks: "Let me go"

A last whimper,
the atmosphere is now
hazy, the night liquefies
and becomes one with
what used to be shattered.
All that's left is a
familiar breeze.

-written for a club contest-

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  • 12 years ago

    by A lonely soul

    Delicate and fabolous composition with a lot of twist, peppered with a ardent opulence of romantic and sad diction.

  • 12 years ago

    by Brittany C

    I enjoyed reading this poem. The wording was great and got your message a point. It is a nice length and a good read.

    "her cracked soul, trying to
    merge with it and it reveals a
    sincere mourning that
    causes her to writhe."

    maybe try

    "her cracked soul,
    trying to merge with it
    as it reveals a sincere mourning
    that causes her to writhe"

    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by BlueJay

    This, Jenni, has taken every possible comment I had for it originally away. I have nothing left except that if this doesn't win, I'll be amazed! Because this poem is... is... WOW!! In the most fabulous way.

  • 12 years ago

    by Paul Gondwe

    The imagery, the choice of words..all brilliant..you will definately win it

  • 12 years ago

    by The Poet Behind The Poems

    Its not my fav but it was written very well i agree wth connie i loved how u played with the words o talented

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