The Hunter & His Deer

by Melpomene   Oct 21, 2011


For Britt & Jason.
--

Perhaps it was
the canary yellow sun
who played peek-a-boo
on your lips that
lured the hunter -

he who stalks bears
with bravery of
Artemis, dances
bells upon her spine and
I often ponder
if he saw you through
the world of a
rifle scope, pin-pointing
the moment he wished
to tangle the milky way
within your hair.

He like a clever hunter
knew when to take the shot,
showering your heart with
the feelings of a kaleidoscope
and printing X's and O's
'pon the flower petals
of your skin.

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  • 8 years ago

    by A lonely soul

    This poem has an opulence in its composition. A unique, unparalleled and thoughtful write.

  • 8 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    ^Kidding! : P

    I like Britt, yet we're not that close, we talked but I don't know the whole story! still I guess that was a good description of love, a hunter looking for his deer, somehow I could imagine it, though your poems usually are too beautiful to be imagined, this write seemed so simple yet held such images that made me just picture the scene. Well, I think the last part where you used one of Britt's titles X's and O's and the petal of her skin, made me know how tender she is, and mostly sensible.

    'tangle the milky way
    within your hair'

    Britt, what shampoo do you use? lol
    What I could grasp from this line is that Britt has black hair? because it refers to space or sky or something... well wait, maybe you meant to say that Britt is beautiful in a simple way? Who knows! ;)

    'showering your heart with
    the feelings of a kaleidoscope'
    ^

    I LOVE it when somebody uses 'shower' in a poem, it seriously brings the poem to life.

    What's wrong here?
    shower....hair...shampoo o.O
    well, I suffer from dandruff! : P

    Very wonderfully writenn, Melpo! Loved the write, Britt obviously did too. ; D

  • 8 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    ^Kidding! : P

    I like Britt, yet we're not that close, we talked but I don't know the whole story! still I guess that was a good description of love, a hunter looking for his deer, somehow I could imagine it, though your poems usually are too beautiful to be imagined, this write seemed so simple yet held such images that made me just picture the scene. Well, I think the last part where you used one of Britt's titles X's and O's and the petal of her skin, made me know how tender she is, and mostly sensible.

    'tangle the milky way
    within your hair'

    Britt, what shampoo do you use? lol
    What I could grasp from this line is that Britt has black hair? because it refers to space or sky or something... well wait, maybe you meant to say that Britt is beautiful in a simple way? Who knows! ;)

    'showering your heart with
    the feelings of a kaleidoscope'
    ^

    I LOVE it when somebody uses 'shower' in a poem, it seriously brings the poem to life.

    What's wrong here?
    shower....hair...shampoo o.O
    well, I suffer from dandruff! : P

    Very wonderfully writenn, Melpo! Loved the write, Britt obviously did too. ; D

  • 8 years ago

    by nourayasmine

    Mel! write about me and Anas. : D

  • 8 years ago

    by Exostosis

    Agreed with all the above comments. This is an alluring composition. The last two stanzas really narrow it down to a home run. Each word, each line precisely penned. A mystical piece composed with a wave of magic wands. Very creative.

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