Apart-

Great, great job! You conveyed it all so well and I could feel the pain as I read the words. I am experiencing something like this, keep strong and keep writing. It really helps.

I think it was the title that lured me in to reading your poem, but it was the poem itself that made me keep reading. It drew me in emotionally because I can relate to the feelings the poem is talking about. The poem is filled with a sadness, a longing, loss, grief, something has been taken or gone away, and is missing from the person's life..or more someone. The poem also contains regret that they're unable to move on, unable to be happy, or cope with being forgotten, left behind, abandoned, or perhaps the speaker in the poem left the other person, but not by choice, and still wants them, still hopes for them to come back into their life, and it's killing them inside, hoping for the impossible. Time does have a way of corrupting our emotions, what starts out with missing someone, can turn into a gaping hole as time drags on. People often say time makes things better, but I disagree. it just means the world forgets your grief, but you never do. The ache and the hole just festers inside, sometimes at the back of your mind, sometimes it's so overwelming you can't think about anything else. This poems tears at my heartstrings, it feels like there's an underlying layer of hope in the words, but it's something the speaker can't help, can't control, subconcious maybe because the speaker knows in their sensible side that the world, the universe is set against them and the other person. Set to tear them apart. but the other side still wants to think about the possibility of what they would of done to change how things turned out. and if the other person ever came back, what they would do to make things turn out better than the first time...I guess that is what I took from it personally..a poems always has different meaning to the author and the readers the author knows what they mean, and the reader often relates it to what they know, or to themselves..and to me this poem hits home. It reminds me of how I feel about someone I've lost, someone I don't have closure with, and probably never will. And being apart from that person..hoping against hope and logic and against all odds for a miracle, for that person to come back.. it tears you apart. it drags you deep into the emptiness they left in your life, the part of you they took with them and you know you won't ever get back. It's loving them..but hating how things are, how they turned out, and how it all makes you feel and how it all taints the good memories with pain or sorrow or grief. How you fight a battle between the emptiness and trying to find something that gives you back part of what you've lost. It's fighting to move forward again when your world seems to have stopped spinning. It's knowing that the past is what keeps you at your stand still and trying to let go..but something keeps you tied to it. it sends you in circles.

I thought the poem was amazingly deep, or to me it held deeper meaning. It was beautifully written, and done very well. I have no critiques for it, I just wished to comment on what I took from it. and tell you I could relate to it. I enjoyed the read, for all it was sad, it also held truth and depth.

^I absolutely agree with Abed.

I really enjoyed reading this poem because of the omnipresent emotions and because of its flow. The speakers tone is somehow soft yet confident. It feels as though the speaker is almost sorry for saying and feeling this, while both know it's the right thing to do. There is nothing I'd fault about this poem because even though it's so sad it's beautifully written.

I really love two things in here:

One - the creative title with the dash beside it, as if you're really stressing on the idea of being 'apart' .. there is a missing other side to the word, which means you are apart from him, emotionally, and distant wise. AMAZING!

Two - the whole idea and how you metaphorically penned it. I could feel that you are no longer yearning to be with him, for he changed you 360 degrees, you no more have this love for him, he's leaving you bruising yourself, your hands are numb, crying, and not only chaining your heart, but your time, thoughts, and maybe freedom. He has pulled your strings, and now you yearn to be APART..
love that.