Inundated

I believe you left no room for improvement here I would feel inudated if I had to

Oh I absolutely love this. I do this same thing all of the time! D: The simile 'like a drowning man' seems pretty dead-on to me. Anyway, this is a wonderful poem. :) 5/5

Another beauty by... DUN DUN DUN... Jenni! Haha. Sorry, I couldn't resist. Anyway, that was beautiful; I loved the flow of the poem. It really seemed to just...touch me with beautiful imagery and extraordinary emotions.

5/5

-Heather

Jenni, you've done a wonderful job here, and I think that this is the best thing I've read from you. I love the whole idea behind that, and how far you went with the wording, structure and of course... the brilliant figurative language used.:)

You just have a way with words and its cleary visible in this piece. Just a few lines but with great meaning.