Once Blooming

So touching words... Excellent!
5/5 for you!

Well how did I miss this masterpiece! This was such a strong piece and I really enjoyed every word. Great work as always :] -Nik

This one is nice

this one is best

Drowning in tides of memories
While standing at the edge of a river
Wondering if its the water shining
Or may be my tears have turned silver
this one is nice

this one is best

Deep and touching write. the imagery though sad is beautiful painted by your words.

/Now even my own reflection has left me
// very profound lines ... i relate it with a feeling of nothingness ... of worthlessness.

/Accompany me to my funeral
Dig six feet below to my future
//
I really loved the ending. so much sadness in them. beautifully expressed :)

Hmm, yes the sadness can be read all throughout this poem in your words. Your feeling are poured into each line and echoed between the lines. The had a simple structure that was easily kept and a good flow though it did seem a little messed up with the rhyming you had. I could tell in places that you were forcing the rhyme. You would shape the stanza so it would fit the rhyme but it sometimes messed up the flow or messed up the imagery.

"Drowning in tides of memories
While standing at the edge of a river
Wondering if its the water shining
Or may be my tears have turned silver"
^^^
This was a clever stanza and I liked the imagery in being drowned while you were only standing at the edge. Also the rhyming of silver and river was a bit forced but I think the stanza still carried itself. Your emotion made up for a lot in this poem. I could tell that you were writing your heart away into these lines and it is evident with each word of each stanza.

Overall, I liked the poem and I think with some more adjustments this poem could really have a strong overall foundation and stronger message. Still the poem was effective in portraying your feelings and helping you open up. I am glad to see you writing and also improving as a poet. Great job and keep writing!