Freedom

Hannah took the phrase "bottling up emotions" and created a truly touching metaphoric piece!

At first my thoughts were headed in the direction of an alcoholic and then I dove deeper into the phrase .... That is when I started to truly fall in love with this poem... Its creative angles and heart touching emotion can be felt from start to finish... To forgive the one who has caused you to "bottle" your emotions, or hold things in is a soul searching event. I applaud Hannah for pouring her thoughts into this awesome poem in the way that she did... and as sad as it is, its beautiful in the sense that it's a cleansing poem... the ending was superb to a beautifully sad poem!

"Turquoise droplets tremble down
the jagged crevice between
my baffled mind and justifying heart."

A great balance of imagery and symbolism. Turquoise is such a lovely colour - clear, pristine yet the way you used it made it seem so morbid, sad. Interesting, your choice of adjectives for mind and heart. Usually, it is the mind that justifies, and thr heart, baffled. It really shows conflict within the persona.

"However, I'm not weeping for you."

Powerful verse. Shows strength, a hint of bitterness, though.

"I've kept a six year bottle inside,
holding the tears I couldn't cry,
each one laced with one of your treacherous
lies."

Really creative. The first line seemed rather awkward, though. 'Six-year old'?

"Your repetitive pleading ricochets
against my deafened ears."

Lovely word choice. I like 'ricochets,' has a nice ring to it with repetitive and ears.

"When the bottle has leaked its final drop,
I can breathe crisp air again,
it's no longer tainted with the burden of
you."

Really hopeful part, here. Sometimes all we need to do is let it all out, instead of holding it all in. It's very cathartic, and the outcome would be so much better.

"Tonight, I forgive you -
for me."

Loved the ending. Most things we do, in the end, really is for ourselves. Holding grudges and such do not really affect that person our anger is directed to.

That's some powerful stuff , this is so relatable
The pain is so much that we have to keep it bottled
Up locked with a fake smile an amazing write

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First thing first, NOMINATED!!!!! And to my favs!!

OMG, this has got to be the BEST poem you ever wrote! I am in love with every bit of it. The word usage, the metaphors, the tone of sadness that ripples through out this piece.

The way you opened up this poem wast spectacular. Nd then came the bottle part, oh god that killed me. But what I loved the most is how you ended it, how you said you would forgive him for your own sake!!

One of the best poems I read in a long while.
Love everything you write.

xxx

Turquoise droplets tremble down
the jagged crevice between
my baffled mind and justifying heart.

- this first line is just amazing, how can anyone not be drawn in by that?? Excellent start and the introduction of what your emotions are like and perhaps the battle between your head and heart.

However, I'm not weeping for you.

- this line is doing its job when it stands alone, I love this line because sometimes we feel this is true, and other times we say it because it is not true but we wish it was, kind of in denial!

I've kept a six year bottle inside,
holding the tears I couldn't cry,
each one laced with one of your treacherous lies.

- the idea of the bottle is very well placed here, it relates to keeping the emotions bottled inside but then also the image of a bottle full of tears. This is quite unique. You then explain that the tears have been cause by lies and I love the use of the word treacherous!

Your repetitive pleading ricochets
against my deafened ears.
For once,
I'm the one who is too busy to listen.

- I sense the tables have turned here and this used to be the other way about when you were pleading and they never listened? Again your word choice here is great, with the words bouncing between your ears, it is like you don't want to hear them but they keep coming back again.

When the bottle has leaked its final drop,
I can breathe crisp air again,
it's no longer tainted with the burden of you.

- I am in love with this idea, of the bottle finally being opened for release and it may take a bit of time but eventually you will be able to breathe again and feel free of this pent up emotion and bottle of tears.

Tonight, I forgive you -
for me.

- Excellent way to end hannah, we cannot forgive other people to satisfy them, we have to do it for ourselves, when it feels right and because when we do not forgive them they are still a big part of our lives until we learn to let go.

Amazing write !