Her Tale Of Woe

by -Choke-On-MY-Halo-   Jul 8, 2013


Laying down staring at the moon,
A girl of nineteen seemed to appear
Stunning was she though she'd never let it show
Beseeching she said,"Let me tell you the story of my fall"
Mesmerised by her plea all though was gone
Taking the silence as a yes she began her tale of woe

"As a child i saw the world as it truly seemed to be
No innocence to hide behind
Yet that's what the heart craved
So as to please both the heart and soul
I made a companion
An imaginary friend I believe the term is called
I had named her Bella"

At that last word her voice cracked
Breathing softly to keep the tears at bay
Her voice went low
And began once again

"She was temptation to most if any truly saw her
Silver hair violet eyes creamy pale skin
I really could go on and on but I shall not
The thing that brought me to my knees was the goodness and innocence of her heart"

Tears escaped their prison
Time almost seemed to slow
Yet all she wished was for it to reverse
Though it never would

"We really had everything five year old girls could ever want
Yet we knew our family would ruin it all
Sanity my family couldn't claim
Like a coward I went to slumber deep within
My bride could deal with them for i knew she'd never break"

Sad violin music the heart played
Painful and slow it still appeared whole
But the tale continued on

"Years passed and traumatic events just became a sad pile
The gracious and warm hearted girl I promised to love forever died
A pessimist seemed to bloom and flourish with every sunrise.

Hardly any saw the girl I made and swore to cherish
Only three souls seemed to pentrate her spiked castle
Myself, her first love and a man she shouldn't have let in

Insane was the pain I let her suffer
Thinking back it's a miracle she lasted two months after my reawakening
Strong she had looked but like Cinderella the magic was gone at midnight

Planning her last scheme she didn't care who stood in her way
Friend or foe they'd be used
Creating a reason for herself to commit suicide"

Mournfully she touched her wedding ring
Whispering softly the last part of her life
She looked at the moon

"After I had closed my eyes days before my highschool graduation
I saw her for the last time
She tenderly kissed me goodbye and said I'd always be her wife
Didn't know what she had meant till the next day..

So now sweet angel you know my tale
Tell God I'll be there later for i too need to say my own farewells"
With that she faded into the night

Collaboration with Trinity Heart

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  • 9 years ago

    by Rainbow Writers

    I didn't even realize this was a collaboration until I've read the last line, you guys wrote it quite seamlessly, I couldn't tell who's who! Kudos to you for that - it's quite hard being able to write like that.

    That being said, another poem that I feel like deserves more recogniztion from the community - it's an extremely beautiful picturesque tale of despair, you blended togther old-style poetry with new, and captured an incredible amount of emotion in each stanza that kept me invested in the poem. I still think as a poet, you should use more punctuation so the readers know how to read it (and it'll help with the flow) and it'll make this incredibily written poem, even better.

    "As a child i saw the world as it truly seemed to be
    No innocence to hide behind
    Yet that's what the heart craved"

    That part struck a chord with me - I've always felt that I was a bit too aware of my surroundings and how things worked since I was litte, and came to learn some harsh truths about many things that way as a child. In retrospect, I wish I could go back and still maintain some sense of innocence for a longer time..

    Overall: Another well-written poem by two incredible talented poems! Like Ive probably mentioned in every comment, just work on the punctuation, it matters a lot more than you think :p

  • 9 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Other than the length this piece is pretty good. The story is conveyed well and nicely crafted. Your techniques were pretty nice, the wording wasn't too simple but overpowering either. nice job

  • 10 years ago

    by broken sword

    W0w its really t0uching! Great imaginati0n power..
    5 for it

  • 10 years ago

    by Vic Johns

    A moving story !

  • 10 years ago

    by Shades of Gray

    This is very well written. In a piece like this, it's easy to let emotions take over and become sloppy with your writing. But you did not. This poem flowed very nicely. It left you wanting to know more.
    "Tears escaped their prison" <--- That is my favorite line. It's a unique way of describing it, much better than just saying "I cried".
    Excellent poem. 5/5
    ~Shades of Gray

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