Kuebiko....in Winter

by Hellon   Jul 16, 2013


It was December now
and Kuebiko noticed that
no smoke billowed from
the chimney pot,
no Christmas tree lights
winked from the farmhouse window
and the usual smells of
turkey and cranberry sauce
were absent from the
crisp breeze
which came to his field.

The gate creaked
in the night
keeping him from sleep
and the fence lay un-mended.

He had become leaner
these past months
the sleeves from his shirt
were now missing
...he no longer stood tall.

and...

As the cruel winds howled
and the snow arrived
his head drooped
some more
as he shivered in his field
and wondered why...

@Hellon 16th July 2013

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  • 10 years ago

    by Karla

    Kuebiko is a masterpiece my friend.

  • 10 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Congrats :)

    xxx

  • 10 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Aww Hellon, my heart just aches throughout this whole piece! I'm very glad you created this character, made him so lovable, compassionate, and had the imagination to give him such a voice. I know many have read and will continue to read :]

    I like how you have been going through the seasons with him, and now you take the reader through the wintertime... especially with Christmas, it seems like a time of fullness, where you get together with family and there is a brightness (not just in the lights put up but in each others' eyes). Here though, there is a lack of that and it is heartbreaking he can't experience this or see it. That emptiness is very real, and with that closing line, shows the starkness of the character, physically and then him questioning why it has to be like this.

    Beautifully written as usual and congratulations on the win!!! Very well-deserved!

  • 10 years ago

    by Amreen

    This is the first time Im reading a Keubiko poem of yours and Im already connected to him. I always feel very sad when I picture old people abandoned and have written one such poem dedicated for those beautiful people cuz I myself try to spend my weekends with my grandparents and have fun with them. This phase of life should be the most calm and peaceful time, but the young ones only tend to give them much of it.
    I loved the entire story you share here. I felt every little sound happening around me. I too look forward to read more of him.

    Excellent!!

    Keep writing:)

  • 10 years ago

    by Piogga

    I am fast becoming a huge fan of yours. I especially love this character you've built so well over time. It feels like one of those book/TV series I've gotten addicted to that I never want to end. I hope this isn't the last, because I'd be really really sad and you'd also be ending this on a sad note. Also, the next one should be on a happier part of Kuebiko's life. :)

    • 10 years ago

      by Hellon

      I'm glad people seem to be enjoying Kuebiko, thank you all for your positive feedback. I have another two written and, without giving too much away...things do change for the better in them :)