I love the way you write! There's so much colour and beautifully expressed emotion, with awesome imagery :)
10 years ago
by Beautiful Soul
I think this deserved a win as well. I read the other comments and have to disagree with Hannah. I liked the use of daffodil. I think it lets you get your point across. It seems here you like flowers and that is amazing because they can be a great source of inspiration. I like how you painted this poem full of hope and even wrote it near the end of your poem. I like how you said it takes courage to walk over those daffodils. That line really stood out to me. I think it's because that it takes courage to ruon something so beautiful. You make flowers in general I believe to be something magical.
Overall I think this poem is beautiful. I believe again you useflowers as something filled with hope to help the character out from a darkness or sadness they feel. The flow I agree is great as well because you maintain it throughout the whole poem. Which is not easy to do in a long poem. I like how simply the lines dance but they say so much inside them.
It is very lovely and has lots of emotions behind the symbolism of the daffodils. You compare this person to this flower in many ways... the first time you met and how the relationship progressed. You want it to be painted yellow for happiness but you think you failed by bringing loneliness and darkness into their life. However, you continue to show build them up by showing them they have bravery and courage to stand alone, to not trample over the Daffodils of life, but to embrace them and let them line your pathway.
I'm not fond of the overuse of Daffodil, I think it could be dialed down some and not used so often...but I do understand why you chose to do so. It's just my personal preference.
Throughout the poem you had fantastic flow, it just moved from one line to the next flawlessly! Great job!
10 years ago
Interesting. The mix and power of emotions in well done in an intriguing sense. Left me pondering what symbolism really is and how unique it is for all of us. This gave me a new perspective on poetry and the basic emotions of life. Amazing