The Ring (a LotR poem)

by Lemon & Midnight Sky   Feb 28, 2014


There was this guy
He was taking a hike
Came upon this ring
He thought it was a beautiful thing

He slowly stooped to pick it up
Traced its smooth surface and he fell in love
For the band of metal he felt a yearning
Inside him a strange obsession began burning

For this power he wishes to have
I's killing him inside and out
He's becoming a demon
When noone can see him

The ring twists his mind and drives him insane
It's moulding his thoughts and altering his brain
He's unrecognisable, he has no control
For the evil in the ring has blackened his soul

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  • 8 years ago

    by stacy

    Nice write zac !!!! :)

  • 8 years ago

    by LittleMsPink

    Powerful poem, i really like this one
    kinda reminds me of the movie "the lord of the rings" ;D

    • 8 years ago

      by Lemon

      That's what it's based on lol :)

  • 8 years ago

    by DarkLight

    1st there are some typos, line one 2nd stanza, stooped, instead of stopped, 3rd stanza, I's guess you wanted to write It's or Is, 4th line same stanza, noone instead of none. Last stanza, the word blackened, maybe you should have used the word darkened, those are just some of my suggestions and I hope you okay with my corrections. Other than than, I like your poem.

  • 8 years ago

    by DarkLight

    1st there are some typos, line one 2nd stanza, stooped, instead of stopped, 3rd stanza, I's guess you wanted to write It's or Is, 4th line same stanza, noone instead of none. Last stanza, the word blackened, maybe you should have used the word darkened, those are just some of my suggestions and I hope you okay with my corrections. Other than than, I like your poem.