Asunder

The magical world of words is displayed in this elegant and sorrow filled poem, written by Kakera. Brilliant!!!
This three stanza poem is a powerful display of old world language, making me feel like I'm back in medieval times, truly an elegant poem.
Each stanza touches on the metaphor of a rain and thunderstorm and touches on the sadness and sorrow of a woman alone- my take on this lovely piece.
I have read many Old World poems in my time and yet this poem is fresh and exciting to me, also with the simplicity of thunderstorms, which has been used many times as a metaphor, has been crafted into a poem all on its own.
Kakera has a gift of creative word usage this week, well done!!

Judging comment:

It is very rare that I see exclamation points in poetry, as I see them most often in novels and articles where I think they are over-used. But they had a clear, poignant effect here and I appreciate how you didn't let the exclamations steal away the actual emotions and meaning of the poem. Beautiful flow throughout.... the way you crafted your words and their placement reminded me of reading from an epic or an older piece of literature. I liked the effect and feel of "orchestras of anxiety" and how alive you can make this character's anxiety seem, playing an anthem or something to be mourned. There was also progression and a natural one at that throughout this piece. First, starting off with thunder, then rain, then the realization of a head-on storm that one cannot outrun. I experienced hopelessness as the reader, watching this unfold and knowing that hurricanes seldom leave behind a trail without damage or fear. Well-written. I haven't come across "asunder" in quite awhile and I liked how you have chosen that for your title, it highlights the seriousness of this situation and how divided the character (and particular place) will be after this storm. (4)

Very interestingly written. The pain, the images and the feelings all wrapped in one giving the reader a very desperate and unsettling feel..touching write. Congrats on the win.

Nice poem
it is really rhydemic, I like your style of writting.
but I acually not understand what is u are describing in this poem.

I am not often a fan of classical writing (and this poem reminds me of classical writing) since I often find them to be monotonous, but I liked how your style here clearly reminds me of a medieval scenery yet remains filled with enough tension/emotion. You have a wide range of vocabulary also, which will surely serve you well in other poems as long as you keep the balance as it is within this poem. It's funny you make use of so many exclamation marks since I know many would cringe seeing them in poetry but I thought that's exactly what "made" this poem, if you know what I mean. Keep writing.