by Hellon Aug 9, 2015
category :
Nature, environment /
nature
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Bare branches with outstretched limbs reach for the sun as it peeks from behind the clouds, looking for warmth as the wind strips the last leaves she shivers in her nakedness. A patchwork quilt of crimson and orange scattered below |
by mossgirl19
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Added to faves right away. Mind-blowing, breath-taking, absolutely beautiful in every sense of the word! |
by Everlasting
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Hi Hellon, I wanted to write you a better comment but I'm slow at doing so... |
by Hellon
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Thank you all for your lovely comments. Luce, good catch on the period which should have been a comma. With regards to your question about a period at the end of a haiku well, I'm not really sure. I just try to avoid punctuation if I can when writing short forms. I think the haibun could be different I guess, I was trying to take the reader through each stage of this tree, which is in my garden, and I actually did observe it for a year. I was trying to portray camera shots with words I guess.... |
by Ben Pickard
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To be honest, Hellon, how this wasn't in the top 3 this week is completely beyond me. This was a stunning piece of poetry that fully deserved to win. |
by Mr. Darcy
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Hello Hellon, |
by Ben Pickard
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What a beautifully written piece and invitingly laid out, too. Excellent |