by Hellon   Sep 14, 2016

A snow-pregnant sky,
threatening to give birth
to another blizzard,
mirrored my mood


as I plunged into Sorrow Lake
its undercurrent of worry
pulled me down
drowning me in the
murkiness of life

your face...your beautiful face,
flashed before my eyes.

@Hellon 14th September 2016


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  • 5 years ago

    by hiraeth

    This poem popped up in my 'recommended poems' section & i'm so glad it did. I really, really love the first stanza, just the sheer imagery of it.

  • 5 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Judging Comment

    The beginning stanza is one of the most powerful and creative starts to a poem that I have read in quite some time.

    Snow - pregnant sky... love it!

    Blizzards can bring on despair- heavy thoughts and burdens..

    and the ending ties it up nicely, the face of a loved one... melting all darkness... just beautiful!!

  • 5 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Sometimes love is the only force to keep us afloat in times of despair.

    Well worded Hellon, good metaphors and not one word superfluous here!

    Well done, take care


  • 5 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello Hellon,

    ...there is something powerful about nature's weather that relates directly to human emotions. The bilious cloud formations that hang heavy, defying gravity, is much like holding in grief that swells within like your simile.

    ...after a while, the holding back has to give, like a dam, and once it goes, make way... grief suffocates in sorrowful, drowning waves of sorrow, the reason for feeling so wretched, so impossibly sad is there, an image of their face, so beautiful and yet, so far away...

    Well done, Hellon. This is up to your very high standards. Nobody, does it better Carly!

  • 5 years ago

    by Brenda

    Just amazing! I'm blown away from this write-

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