I don't remember every seeing a rhyming poem from you Nana so this was a surprise.
I like how you counter each 'problem' in the first lines with a positive solution in the second lines. Like you're saying...bring it on, I can deal with anything or perhaps you are just giving that impression when really you afraid. I guess you could interpret this in many different ways and that's why I like it so much.
A sunny outlook behind the sorrow which breathes.
Short and rhyming yet it says a lot about your feelings and
situation without going too deep...which makes this write
happy and sad at the moment...take care
3 years ago
by Em (marmite)
Rania I have to say this, as with all your work is outstanding especially as (if memory serves me right) it's one of few pieces you have rhymed but do so with little thought in my opinion
Title - really makes me think of hell or at least how it's perceived full of burning fire so makes me wonder whether or not this is about burning or hell though I guess reading on will answer my questions
1) I love the imagery here because even though you say skies I don't actually think this is about rain as I have never seen it called ‘showers of cold’ before so presume and it's only a presumption that the sky here is in fact a mind therefore raining coldness especially as I read on and ‘you grin as though soaked in gold’ which is what many people do to cover up the darkness they smile, they say things are fine when in truth they are not.
2) This points more towards depression and the ‘raining’ of the mind than rain itself because you use the words ‘choke’ and ‘fear’ and sometimes we feel as though we are choking with fear when anxious, depressed or if we're unfortunate enough, both. Though you say you fear nothing at all which makes me think I am wrong then again we so often enough pretend to ourselves that we fear no one when in actual fact we fear many things but if we lie to ourselves often enough we will believe it too.
3) The only thing I can say here is that it definitely chilled me to the bone and made me goosebumpy - loved this couplet.
4) Wow. This again leads me to believe it's about depression because you say you're ‘numb’ and that nothing can threaten you not the cold or anything else because you no longer feel anything and that can only be due to one thing, in my opinion anyway but you tempt more rain to fall (beautiful image again) as you'll plunge it into the depths of hell ‘fire’ where it belongs… I could be reading way too much into this but these are only my thoughts and I'm standing by them.