Exbury gardens in late May (haiku)

by Mr. Darcy   May 28, 2019


beside fish filled pond
fly chaffinches sweeping up

our picnic litter

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- Mr. Darcy
© 2019

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kL1IQoPbBuM

* The word, sweeping' is a metaphor in this poem
so really has no place in a haiku, but I liked it and so it remains, unlike my breadcrumbs. The syntuit form doesn't have this restriction.

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  • 6 years ago

    by Hellon

    This was lovely but I'd like to read more so perhaps a string haiku? The guy in the white suit had his own story to tell as he waited in his gallery...the bridge was beautiful and, how many people have walked over it?

    Like I said...beautiful as it but...there is a much bigger story here I felt...

    • 6 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Thanks, Hellon
      You are right, sometimes snapshots like these need just that bit more.
      Your wisdom is always appreciated.

  • 6 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    I think it works perfectly. A lovely tranquil scene. Milly x

  • 6 years ago

    by Michael

    I love this image Mr D
    A moment captured:)

    • 6 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      Thanks, Michael. It was a lovely day.

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