Well written Milly and we all need this optimism when feeling this low in our lives. And more often than not, when looking back at a later time, we often wonder why we let it impact us as much as it did.
Walter you are right when we look into the face of darkness it can seem that there is no path to the light but in all of our tomorrow the sunshine eventually comes and the darkness fades into oblivion. best wishes Milly x
Thank you Daniel sometimes no matter hiw many times I read my poems I just cant see the wood for the trees. Your right you should be "you'd and as usual I've forgotten the e on the end if youre"
The first line "Suicide is painless for the victim so they say" was meant to grab the iattention of the reader but more specifically because often people who contemplate suicide feel that their lives are so full of pain or that there is no solution to their situation so suicide in that split second seems the less painful option. A quick one stop solution to make it all stop.. Getting them to think instead about the pain they would inflict on the other people in their lives is sometimes all it takes to get them past that dark moment and to a point when things don't feel quite so bad. best wishes Milly x
An uplifting poem about a difficult topic. I think the rhyme and jaunty rhythm make it a little difficult to read at first, especially the first paragraph which unfortunately reads a little oddly. Suicide is painless? It grows in itself after that, and the rhyme and rhythm make more sense.
‘You surely leave behind’
Shouldn’t that be ‘you’d’ or ‘you’ll’? Sorry
‘If your standing on the brink’
There’s a typo here, with you’re.
They say that the last thoughts of some people who tried to end their lives were that many of their problems are fixable. Something to remember, I’d say. X