Yesterday, I walked along your steel teeth,
haunted yet comforted that I could see an
engineered path of death before me.
Today, I didn't cross your glinting eyes.
I convinced myself I deserved to be safe
next to the soybean field, where wildflowers
grew hand in hand, where the grass was
just long enough and just kind enough
not to scratch my heels.
Tonight, the sun warmed my back as it
sang its lullaby. Birds flew into its realm
and I didn't feel the fire consume my will.
Instead, I felt energy and contentment.
The whistle emerged from imagination -
my breath caught, several feet away.
Your writes have a way to Express the unexpressable scenes and attach it to the surrounding around you as well as to your feelings and thoughts which makes your write unique! Well written and Congrats on the win!
MAA..this must be one of the freshest I've read so far. I have been moved by poems and I have had my thoughts provoked with deep poems, but this, this is is fresh air. I enjoyed reading every single line, why did ANDREA nominate it a33. I love it. I love every word, it's so perfect. The structuring, the flow, the punctuation, the word choice.
The title, the opening line and the closing verse; it's a perfect poem. Added to my favourites.
Oh, Rania, thank you! I did edit and may go back and re-think parts of the third stanza as initially, I only wrote the first two parts and had intended to keep it more concise. I wrote a bit more at home and mulled over a few lines to see if they really added anything or not.