Ode to your Collarbones

by Daniel   May 19, 2020


and how they protrude so vulnerably
against your flesh, as if a semi hidden
treasure laid beneath your skin
that would surface only to my lips;

naked and casting elongated
shadows across your breasts.

I am transfixed by how
they traverse the precipice
of your neck like the perfect
silhouette, and how they cling

to your shoulders, as if moonlight itself
etched them onto your chest.

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  • 1 month ago

    by Skyfire

    Beautiful ode to the details of the human body.

  • 1 month ago

    by yogi73

    Love this

  • 1 month ago

    by nourayasmine

    I love collarbones as well. One of the most beautiful details in a female body. Missed your poetry.

  • 1 month ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I'm "technically" supposed to be working, but I just had to quickly log in to say I MISSED YOU AND YOUR POETRY! (even though it's only been a little over a month or so, it's felt like longer)

    I love the line of "semi hidden treasure" - it's sweet without sounding overly sappy or cliche.

    You gave a tenderness and passion with the perfect balance of visuals, and that last line is even more romantic, being graced by moonlight. The use of "etched" worked well here!

    In the second stanza, should shadow be plural?

    I liked how this didn't continue for many more stanzas, not that it wouldn't be as lovely, but that you said what you wanted to say in a simple but profound way, not needing lots of similes or metaphors. It felt more like a quiet observation, a reverence.

    PLEASE share more! Hope you've been well :)

    • 1 month ago

      by Daniel

      Oh I've missed you and yours too! Work isn't going anywhere :D Sorry for the absence! Just been so busy and not particularly inspired to be honest. :) It should be 'shadows' yes.

      The poem was actually originally a kind of haiku, and it evolved a bit! Hope you're well too, and I will be sharing more.

  • 1 month ago

    by cassie hughes

    Beautifully written. A tender and touching read or is it...

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