Watch Out ( Acrostic + Telestich )

by Everlasting   Mar 4, 2021

Down, i look. You turn to see me, so slowlY
Every now and then, i turn to see you toO
Probably because i am like yoU
Resting at the edge of the hill of our own seA
Eager to see beyond the waters, searchinG
Silently, within tides and reefs of the panoramA
So, in awe of the beauty, I...
I see how the sea becomes one with the oceaN
Oh merging! Merging! As the sun shineS
Now brighter than ever without doubT,
Why oh then do i feel melancholY?
If all i wish was to be one with the ocean toO
Like the sea if the ocean was yoU
Looking at me as i look down the wateR
Tides rising. Splashing. Calling me in, aS,
Unawarely, i, stop looking at you, and you, at mE
Reefs watching and a sea gulL
Now, us, drowned, so alooF


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  • 3 days ago

    by Jack

    The end is awesome

  • 1 month ago

    by Walter

    This is a very clever write and I love the hidden message in the end!

  • 1 month ago

    by Lost star

    This is a truely exceptional write, I have added to favs to admire at will. Wonderful.

  • 1 month ago

    by Jonathan Jewell

    Wow, you write stuff like this in an hour and a half? amazing. my poems take about, um, well, they appear all at once, then I try and write them down immediately - if I don't, I forget them. You know what happened to a couple of them from the poem of mine you commented on! But mine are all child-like, without depth or cleverness. Yours capture so much more, and because of that, they will endure! thanks for this! and great title too!

    • 1 month ago

      by Everlasting

      That’s how we write, we fish until we catch something. We just have to get better at catching :D

    • 1 month ago

      by Everlasting

      Thanks for your comment.

  • 1 month ago

    by Keira Pickard

    'Depression will turn you against youself'

    I spent ages working that out!
    This is wonderful. It must have taken a long time to lay it all out, but the result is excellent. A really interesting format... to be honest, I hadn't heard of this form before, and had to look it up! I like the actual content, and also the title is very clever.

    Now brighter than ever without a doubT
    ^^ does it need a comma or elipses at the end? I don't know :)
    This truly is brilliant.

    • 1 month ago

      by Everlasting

      Yeah, it took approximately an hour and thirty minutes to finish this piece. May be, I’ll be able to finish another one faster next time?

      Thank you for your comment. I really appreciate it. I’ll take your suggestion, and I’ll place a comma at the end.

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