Lost Color (Senryu)

by Star   Jun 24, 2019


I pressed the last red
flower you gave me, in a
book I barely read.

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  • 1 day ago

    by Jane Do-Re-Mi

    I think you do not seem quite ready to forget this person and so, you press the last flower left from this relationship. I wonder if, in 20 years time, if it falls from your book will you remember who it was from?

    • 1 day ago

      by Star

      Maybe :) thank you for reading!

  • 7 months ago

    by M. Rene'

    Fantastic poem. Beautiful senryu.

  • 11 months ago

    by hiraeth

    it's not very good, but i did sketch something for this poem: https://i.imgur.com/gNrFS8B.png

    • 11 months ago

      by Star

      This is random, and it’s really good I can imagine the poem on the empty page:) Thank you so much!

  • 1 year ago

    by Tony Grannell

    Hello Star,
    Short, sharp, shock indeed. Acute as it is poetically brilliant. A succinct gem in the art of literature.
    Very well done.
    Regards, Tony

    • 1 year ago

      by Star

      Thank you so much!!

  • 1 year ago

    by hiraeth

    I've been re-reading this piece a lot, finding the right words to comment but still haven't been able to string together the right ones. I think what I most enjoy about this senryu is the questions that arise after reading it. Like why did the character preserve a memento of what seems to be an ending (of a relationship ?), why was the book barely read, did it remind the speaker too much of someone? did the speaker just did not care for the book? what does the red flower represent?

    a lot of quesetions, none of them answered but it gives a great glimpse into the speaker's relationship with that person. well-written :)

    • 1 year ago

      by Star

      Thaaaank you ^_^

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