Lost Color (Senryu)

by S.T.A.R.   Jun 24, 2019


I pressed the last red
flower you gave me, in a
book I barely read.

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  • 2 weeks ago

    by Em (marmite)

    Oh my goodness this is short but packs a real punch...

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Ya----Na

    As beautiful as the rose.

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Everlasting

    I just let the flowers to dry and lose color on their own. They dry and become preserve well. I cut the stem and remove some of the petals. If i put it in a book, the book may become damage. Hehe

    Great senryu.

    • 2 weeks ago

      by S.T.A.R.

      I like it when the flower stains the book ^_^
      Thank you Lucero :)

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Rania Moallem

    Very powerful Senryu. Touching and worded effectively..I enjoy such structuring and surprise elements in poems. special Senryu. As for the comma, I definitely disagree with Jamie, it won't work without it, in my opinion.

    • 2 weeks ago

      by S.T.A.R.

      Thank you Rania, I thought so too especially for the meaning :)

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Superb... A powerful punch in a few words says it all. The beauty of the flower undiminished by the insignificance of the person who gave it. The closure and final filing away of a chapter which will be rarely if ever revisited. This is an excellent example of what well written Senryu's do best - packing a punch whilst still leaving it open for the reader to put their own interpretation on it. Milly xx

    • 2 weeks ago

      by S.T.A.R.

      Thank you Milly, Im happy it turned out this way ^_^

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